我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
6 F1 E! {3 S: D' X/ U一住三十多年
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, [. e- W+ y- K8 b邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
+ w. v' \' ~) x4 I似不识  岁月为何物
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# R$ D- D  H' n6 B( {2 d/ k. k头顶英国文学硕士的光环
9 ~9 `) [' D% _) }6 j- @! z邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
! u! P2 m: o9 p( f5 B( W邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
$ |7 w$ {: ]7 u其笛声也悠扬
. ?; Q9 f* J+ i( O: C那是从隔壁传来的
+ l) K' X! K+ j  B. i3 @$ s唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
5 g& x' c$ P! q; L2 |my prestigous neighbour
; V4 S, ^: @8 M; H+ v# fis the only first owner of the unit properties
2 }" Y% y2 {# R0 v: A" \) \in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
# q8 z5 k+ @" jmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
  E# V8 O6 ^$ j) Q/ }0 D8 g- I' e4 IShe has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
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9 c8 t- e, e  [  w3 P2 `) u" iShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
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interwined by dry vines.

6 n8 ^0 |0 @1 N! `( ENeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
! C) _+ a+ K8 |2 S% Ithat is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
4 ~, J0 w) |, Y) ~8 Q/ a' \- Fthe unknown tune is extolling
! X! p! z1 n! ?' Z$ u) `6 h; `the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
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Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
# b# {% D" N3 w$ h5 p8 J另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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! {1 g1 e+ k1 L7 Q修改为：
$ _: b6 b/ n) h' Q0 HHer light-footed movement
9 ?- \" ^& p+ z, O5 o5 Zis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

! D0 s' x5 R- w1 n0 S2 r# a我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。