In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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4 Y2 s) Z" k, ?& m. e' VIn the garden of my heart
  b/ `$ W4 T, \# N* D# [* K/ `You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
6 i6 ^& B9 g- e1 K3 M8 g8 mNourished with my soul
+ t+ W% D6 X" v' N* m6 Y& b: PDevoured my sorrow by thee

: r, k7 o1 U3 R: NIn the memory of my life
# ?9 [2 O  m5 A# d0 m0 NYou planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
( r; R8 i2 t. E+ J. ^) VMay promises fade in the sea
" ?0 n+ r- z7 ~  A- h: I. ~0 t' XSewing back every broken pieces
8 h) E# i7 B) A- pBursting the love out of me
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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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" @$ [/ D: V2 @2 T  _# rIn the garden of my heart
" \: r2 r2 i) p$ n  eYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
8 |1 m, V! |  Z5 [8 BDevoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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写得真好。
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4 c8 _* c+ R$ l加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
- |, A5 \1 X; S* v/ q眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

2 }. q; E3 T/ }4 j9 Z五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
8 g9 f, s( k9 X! g4 y* l; V5 nShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

$ A2 C# w0 w7 E. c" m4 }6 KSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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. p! x, t9 W( Z/ T0 L; RThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.

1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".

4 v, A1 U7 G6 x1 m% T& o$ b2 y2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

- \+ M* A) j+ [8 P. @  O4 nShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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# N5 j- ^! v. W8 NShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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6 t; Z, y0 B, ~1 e% H0 v+ l诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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! h, ~( }& ~2 }9 t& n2 i有啊，有很多经典的例子。

比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

Don't weep at my grave
! X$ v0 W: T  Z/ J: mFor I am not there,
/ m- C% H& \/ j3 P& T& QI've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
/ s7 G5 n" r, |I'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
2 v: p7 J) R1 i: c& e% X3 WRight next to you.

. P) d- g2 E1 i0 r! x) u( R, VDon't be sad
When you remember me,
0 t" v% t* T8 o: {For I'm singing in the sunshine,
6 n9 j  S1 J: R( X( J& T$ h! r, SWild and free,
Flirting with the lighting,
3 S* v& m% F9 `4 c4 s" I4 QPlaying tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
Time and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
& o( O" A1 }8 E  z/ `$ dSwimming in the sea,
! j5 n( U1 U8 {+ l& C; lEnjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.