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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart+ y9 E& J* s$ K) i% H
You planted a tree
$ }  ~( {: c& `& A9 nFrom sunset til dawn7 Y# w, ]" ~) n5 A* b/ U) u$ i
Through darkness to light; Q1 {0 ]# T/ I0 v( d6 ?+ A
Nourished with my soul
4 k& S: s" Z5 J3 BDevoured my sorrow by thee( [/ F  l& `* ~- R
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In the memory of my life  G* i( @6 b% W2 z& X6 t  B
You planted a dream9 t; B$ k1 d3 U( X4 \  i
Should the sky fall down on me
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Sewing back every broken pieces! F$ z/ o  V! ?
Bursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表( m+ Y: R2 a8 y5 A* _- t0 I
听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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. _+ }# Q3 q; F% W6 J3 WIn the garden of my heart1 U& }2 R) i7 G9 ^- P% L
You planted a tree
- E* O: P! b" e% qFrom sunset til dawn
+ R2 |8 k) e3 s) z( i& LThrough darkness to light
4 V9 U1 P7 j. \Nourished with my soul! [, P" a4 s% L% n) x- k! ?
Devoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?) z: N% X4 e7 o% U
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写得真好。7 D5 K1 Z1 t) Y. C
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加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
& K& O6 q6 w3 k# C# u# `' ~, ?1 }眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
, ~# O" A. t6 Y& S+ f写得真好。, C$ f9 N7 W8 U0 G5 i6 {  Y
加精加精!

1 L( t8 Z9 e& U* w% Y, G7 ~我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
' O, H- Q2 k0 G# E6 F如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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: l* E/ Q# N1 y* L9 h8 O; _/ c6 nSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
8 N0 l0 x+ B, p5 ?Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.& L( N* F7 v) r, H* l* h, V

% `5 Q) b: _, j9 a' ?% oSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.! g- u8 A  H5 M  V! U7 G* I
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".9 E0 C, |6 h- s, @% j6 T: [: q
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。' s& t5 K" e! m0 }& k) `
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
6 G0 G9 N( L9 h6 [' L) w" \1 Tthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。6 L% [! G* e* ]( \0 _$ A4 Y
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
1 O) R/ k" Y& Xthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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有啊,有很多经典的例子。' w5 A3 @& j) t4 _* s# p

; k" \5 q9 o$ w/ R# a( q比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》" V, ^/ `2 z3 L4 A! Q* _# |# _& ^
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Don't weep at my grave
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If I'm missed, find a flower,$ ^! d* n" D, x( C$ ?+ v
I'll be there too,) Z3 _  A5 j, C& X3 O9 G! k
Sniffing it's fragrance
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4 b( J; N! h; h% x$ VDon't be sad0 s1 Q6 M2 ~" {; \, _
When you remember me,1 d( U; s2 W9 E" i& g
For I'm singing in the sunshine,/ m# Z, n$ _- w8 [8 B. A+ e. [
Wild and free,: Z. f4 v+ y4 b& b% f
Flirting with the lighting," t) U* S- m9 \( L. P2 `4 j
Playing tag with the wind,
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, ^) a) c2 ?; Z4 J7 Z" h+ O! z3 Q; YTime and again,9 i& x& h" [  a) \+ c: V4 Q
Soaring with the eagle,
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While I'm waiting for thee.
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