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  1. The artist's work pushes our civilization to a higher level.
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9 ~9 L2 H+ ~$ k  改进:Artists' work upgrades our civilization.   l6 ~# K$ L+ e  P8 l, C  x
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  2. For example, you work in a big factory.
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  改进: Suppose you work in a big factory. . N, {, j. C8 q; X6 U+ h$ C$ A$ l8 Y

7 u. v0 E$ o. g! L  3. You'll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job.
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  改进:You'll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career.
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; r0 o3 N" ]; e  K  4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck. : x+ E- `# i# A+ U5 R1 G. U

3 e0 b* p. M) R; ]  改进: We will get nowhere if we rely on luck.
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  5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level.
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4 n9 L( U: h  {3 M; s  改进: He will get a higher salary, thus improving his life.
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5 T0 D! s* @8 C# |+ f2 b& Z1 G( O  6. Their brain is still very young.
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  改进: They are still immature.   b& m! A3 [4 t) G- k

: d, ~2 r! I6 A# s8 E9 a  7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things. 3 h0 i$ \6 ]% x/ N# s/ Q8 m
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  改进: Dissatisfaction impels people for the better. 0 G$ Z7 l( u6 [# @1 _+ r
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  8. They can't analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong. , x- D. l3 H* `$ s! x" ?' o9 d
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  改进: They cannot tell right from wrong.
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  9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time.
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' `6 U6 R7 O) P9 s( d0 u8 u  改进: It will help children learn to make good use of time.
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" R1 e* ~% Z5 A$ y# n3 l6 v  10. Though it is not the best job, it afford to his life.
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  改进: Though it is not the best job, a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it. 7 U" b7 L! H3 H1 e0 }
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  11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation, they want further development.
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  改进: Since people are never satisfied with their status quo, they want further development. ( k7 C% m, M  L; T+ p
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  12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money. 0 m2 l) _/ u) a/ C) \
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  改进: The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money.
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  13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life. / J& x( o5 E7 x4 o* C
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  改进: They like an active life rather than a peaceful one. ' M( f6 P8 J& e8 b* ~$ E

: {* q1 z$ U! B0 T  Z" \  14. Some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money. ( W# ~1 F  X* `. W

4 p) M. m- W+ K' k0 k; U; H+ H  改进: Some cigarettes may cost even more. " |. U- n  @8 g( V
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  15. Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the discovery of new products. / k; ~4 f2 t0 ]# `+ g
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  改进: Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the invention of new products. 3 I$ Z& t+ t6 a" R

2 @9 v: h( I; z& t4 {  16. In order to suit the needs of entering into work, students must grasp some technical skills.
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  改进: In order to meet the needs of future work, students must learn some practical skills. 5 N8 _3 J) g" ^
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  17. It is very necessary more qualified scientists and technicians. 7 ^/ k6 k, D. y" t" g2 d

4 {# s$ I# R; r3 a9 P6 B  改进: Qualified scientists and technicians are in great demand. ; Q# u) \6 f% N7 j

" z- ^4 G: Z4 `( S' c4 y  18. This knowledge will become a part of your body. 3 N  r  i3 j$ ~3 z1 G

9 r, m, Y8 c7 B, L  改进: This knowledge will become part of you.
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  19. They cannot think clearly. 6 Y9 J$ c" t. T. h- {
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  改进: They cannot think straight. " y$ h. L; I$ ?
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  20. Money can improve their living standard. 4 W3 Q- b# n, u% a7 C; G  v4 l5 k* H

' [: ~, o4 N4 I2 G* B* S  改进: Money can improve their life.
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% b: L1 K/ ]" v; h" S6 U  21. Parents always think that children will get a good job and earn a lot of money.
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4 S( ?7 G/ h; k# J1 u, R' X  22. If a student only cares about money, will lead to be unhappy all his life.
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  改进: If a student only cares about money, he will be misled and will be unhappy all his life. & F4 R6 x3 ]  }8 V+ r

" R2 A/ n' f" W' |4 k  23. One purpose of education is to study the way in which he studies later.
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  改进: One purpose of education is to learn to learn.
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  24. Many parents arrange their children go to learn piano. # b# H7 {. X' ~' q

; U* _+ D  J1 T: B  改进: Many parents send their children to piano classes. & s- L9 A& e5 p7 d' W2 m

, b& O8 M7 @( p; F( T- f/ n  25. When I want to absorb somebody else's opinion, I will study with others. . {6 c) j% F) G& z/ S% w

' L  h2 K6 R8 z  改进: When I need second opinion, I will study with others. 3 S+ v  ]. y- v3 T! ?
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  26. Eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finish eating without doing any washing. 9 }" G& Z* [; a/ \# f# p0 G" f

9 m) a1 _) {: l# D5 p  改进: The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal.
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  27. Smoking can help you relax your mind. ( {% S4 r8 q" {6 z2 U8 J
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  改进: Cigarettes can help you relax. 0 r6 v, n; z( p3 f9 F2 `
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  28. What's about nonsmokers?
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2 B  L' i- ?) R, O( e! K6 ~) g- Q# b" y  改进: What about nonsmokers? : ?- m$ z6 q7 A
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  29. Why not to be a non-smoker? ' W8 b' z( {, V+ E* w
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  改进: Why not be a non-smoker?
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  30. Everyone will have many friends in his life. - x7 n7 l( u. u8 @! Z' ~, ]
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  改进: Everyone has friends in his life.
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  31. I am not good at maths, but English
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  改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English. ! f( H" I3 D' u* f7 N# M9 j4 L

5 ^0 @( g7 R1 ?4 g- f+ X  32. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children's leisure time?
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- |/ [& F& I! B) d- P" k9 n$ ?  33.It is children who clear about their interests.
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  改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests. , A# I; F* H0 z% s$ ]) G

& ~0 O  w) \, c4 s+ a" F; [6 b& ^1 e. E  34. I agree the latter idea. ( {) Y; A2 f, d5 _- E# {9 T
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  改进: I agree with the latter idea. 8 S! M9 r7 W( S

3 J2 u; E% r" z) ~: U  35. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo. / B, h$ t4 V  N1 M% ?5 {6 l0 |
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  改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo.
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  36. So I feel breathe more comfortably now.
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# g1 M: \% q3 a/ E* L/ Z  改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe. - v+ f& m  K  O9 X. j4 y5 b
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  37. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are. & K- A+ T. I3 f* {) s8 J5 m

; J9 L- z5 R% g  改进:People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn.
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  38. No one knows all the things.
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" u6 I" t% R# o* k' W4 w8 x  改进: No one knows everything. 4 j3 [- h2 H7 c8 C
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  39. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life.
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  改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life.
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3 l# L( b: ?1 C2 U  40. Each form of having friends has its advantages
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  改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages.
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: Z# x7 q+ g$ X7 K8 a5 D, s  41. I was admitted to a key university for which few dared to sign up.
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2 U% ~5 R; g2 W+ i+ n* x  改进: I was admitted to a key university to which few dared to apply 2 ]/ S7 l1 s2 k/ {3 J3 s$ j
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  42. Luckily, he recognized an American professor. - H/ W8 ?3 `) b6 q, H. J, C

% S! B2 \+ V1 r) \4 }, P0 S* u  改进: Luckily, he knew an American professor. + C) A# z$ n6 S3 m

8 Q( S" A* U8 t$ o& e; e& l  43. They will learn the bad habits. 2 o9 x1 r2 m1 X% G
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  改进: They will develop bad habits.
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6 f. E% [/ {3 D/ @4 E8 Z  44. In this continued process, people make progress.
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8 c7 a! y$ }+ }1 a+ [# X  改进: In this cycle, people make progress.
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# j0 n1 d3 q, S- |- e7 g  45. Lastly, higher education is equal to higher salary.
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  改进: Lastly, higher education means higher salary.
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0 D, c7 O& w" |+ e  46. By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for deficiency. 7 Y0 Z4 y* H9 Z0 \
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  改进: By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for our shortcomings.
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' e4 A- k* o. ^1 V/ H' o1 B  47. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact.
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& H% H  L" l) c$ e- n; n  改进: A wrong decision will bring even worse result. ! `$ N0 ?+ g3 j0 Z, W. f! O6 k( ~
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  48. You spend all your life to fulfill your willing. # j' |' x' t4 h# w
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  改进: You devote all your life to the fulfillment of your dream. 2 c" s! b9 @* Z6 g; x8 S. k5 h  U

4 Q9 t* [9 e. d" [; n# L- I; }$ G  49. Children should be taught disciplines in order to avoid unnecessary lost. # d1 X/ q+ _- F/ T
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  改进: Children should be taught discipline in order to avoid unnecessary loss. . Y( h; m# D- |5 ~* l" _

5 m$ c% G# O; p  50. I felt alone.
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  改进: I felt lonely.
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发表于 2005-2-24 08:39 | 显示全部楼层
wow, where did you get those sample (the cheglish one)? I have to say the revised samples are really really good.
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 楼主| 发表于 2005-2-26 07:02 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
平时的积累,呵呵!
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发表于 2005-2-26 14:03 | 显示全部楼层

顶!

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发表于 2005-3-1 08:25 | 显示全部楼层

很好。

能否解释一下 status quo 是什么意思。
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发表于 2005-3-1 08:37 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
是现状的意思
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发表于 2005-4-9 18:26 | 显示全部楼层
:lol::lol::lol:
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发表于 2005-4-9 20:42 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
Wow,看得我头晕目悬的...还是记不住...呵呵
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发表于 2005-4-9 21:09 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
有些改进似乎意思有些改变...
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发表于 2005-8-24 02:47 | 显示全部楼层
好哦.xiexie
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发表于 2005-8-24 19:48 | 显示全部楼层
thanks
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发表于 2005-8-24 21:11 | 显示全部楼层
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