我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
0 G! ~% {% ?, ]) V' |% w1 C, ?2 _- {是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
# @# J5 Z% l( x. ~, ?9 s( N# S开车铲雪  挖土栽花
  E' l- S, r% U$ p, _' b! N  a. j似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
  k) \: N  X" G8 ]- Z" P邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
2 J4 o6 v: A9 B+ r5 z4 y邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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8 _: T% b" v/ \* |- j5 R邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
$ p: F3 f3 Q* B2 r9 }* r  h其笛声也悠扬
, ?; V+ ^3 z$ U( }那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
: Z' D# L" j) H3 w* |+ S' R那不知名的曲调
: S2 Y4 P: N) D9 f1 b. _: F# N, g反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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3 O+ \  Y; z9 n7 J英文版，欢迎指正：

9 E5 G( b7 I3 e7 p+ w5 KLiving here for more than thirty years,
/ o3 d5 l4 s" ?; j7 d" ?my prestigous neighbour
' V1 y  X/ i. Q( b7 [2 L* ois the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
8 Q& R7 C. p$ R/ ~She has white hairs and red faces.
# U1 L. S5 C+ l& ?Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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She shovels the snow on her door lane
5 H7 i5 v% ~6 vbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
7 c2 n3 U2 G" G7 c4 Sto plant flowers ---
) w4 ]* M  Y4 A# \- V1 sas if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
. F1 k( H$ |# }: T* R' x. zNeighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

/ q# U& y. T; n4 A6 e9 \Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
. L- G( k) Y2 E- }! n7 u- j6 RWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
4 D& |3 d& \! _$ j1 t$ ?the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
/ _/ \# I" v# c4 M7 s) D( u8 s2 [另外，翻译改动一处：
( |1 |) H# q) Z! [% y1 E; J- [Her light-footed movement
) ^  U' s$ y' N9 L! X$ kis just like a flying swallow.
, |! V  G# k3 g0 x) N; W6 y修改为：
  v" _: r% q  j8 KHer light-footed movement
2 p* o! V9 V! r2 ^5 V) |is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
" M8 Z" y2 o6 X8 ahm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。