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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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" V6 \2 O8 f$ z0 _. U/ bIn the garden of my heart
: T9 ?8 L8 s: }+ X- i' C6 ^You planted a tree2 D* U/ P0 f% ^6 z7 J0 h* y7 B
From sunset til dawn
; O* n1 h3 ^* I( Z+ ^Through darkness to light
) h# K% J% \# w  c. NNourished with my soul! V$ O7 `. e. y
Devoured my sorrow by thee7 ^3 V" @3 a4 y& V. m* S

9 ^3 r* B0 W! ~/ Z: y- mIn the memory of my life; N. X  X3 k/ P+ f7 O) Z( \
You planted a dream
7 w1 s3 J" W+ t# M9 I# bShould the sky fall down on me8 M) O* \5 B( K$ Y9 N
May promises fade in the sea; n- l" \' J  K( F* F
Sewing back every broken pieces. F. R- z4 `2 K* i( w4 e1 j
Bursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
! g9 W6 i- C6 N- W. M听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!  O7 j6 c" h4 Q3 Y5 ~9 Z# ?
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In the garden of my heart
+ V$ z/ B* b% a0 `* I% aYou planted a tree4 p# d4 V3 w8 @+ O! I' X* o0 F
From sunset til dawn
( ~4 _9 J: _5 z/ R% D; aThrough darkness to light0 c, H/ _% L+ d) t
Nourished with my soul
1 E+ j0 Q! H4 P9 ~Devoured my so ...

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, M5 A4 r, s* N5 Q( `眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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写得真好。
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% J: x- g) g% a  j" q加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
" ?/ y% `1 N4 f8 w) t, k眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?, f" {) Y4 ?$ U, i: H+ y1 E/ r. ~
写得真好。
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
& Z+ I$ L% @. V/ t3 _8 q5 `如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表% e& L; o2 u1 ~, S. s! n. C
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.( S$ W' c2 _) k
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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: J2 s  D( ~8 h" P. e4 D$ ~/ f: rThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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4 n( L$ _8 {; U2 v/ S1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".1 e" t" Q3 N2 ~
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表4 A; z1 l( g1 N$ g
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。+ @6 d. ^7 [+ X/ Q' d, X7 j7 X
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
/ J  W2 v8 f' E1 ^6 b, Vthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。/ H7 t! ?2 d3 ^) U- W7 \$ y4 B

' N: b6 a/ D. L* vShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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有啊,有很多经典的例子。! R1 B) f! K  n+ n3 p9 T1 h  q

8 h9 i2 T0 e% F* p' [# i3 P, P比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave
9 C; x* h' E# D$ GFor I am not there,- y) j# Y/ x( ]1 z) x2 V, ~
I've a date with a butterfly
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If I'm missed, find a flower,
' i7 O" X; Z: [- `+ E% JI'll be there too,  c4 b" ?# |' t+ A
Sniffing it's fragrance
) \/ n% U1 H7 Y- R! A3 \% pRight next to you.
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, n" J9 }& C. i, K3 y6 S8 ^! dDon't be sad
8 c$ s" P+ [! o+ }% m4 X0 qWhen you remember me,( C% G& ]# v6 F8 r% j, S
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
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Flirting with the lighting,$ G3 g8 u8 X: |& P( q
Playing tag with the wind,
, l3 [5 G8 P! ^Chasing the thunder
0 `1 I2 a7 Z# B  s: \# j: d5 VTime and again,& d6 N/ w0 V+ _' x7 y- j
Soaring with the eagle,
, b" F  `3 R% ]/ A/ i6 g; hSwimming in the sea,! A2 k, j& a% i! x' H
Enjoying all of nature
8 f- y  A$ {( `! `: ?" W2 c) ~While I'm waiting for thee.
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