In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
# ~' e5 ^& b. s' Y; {From sunset til dawn
: C( Q9 y) r3 i% x! sThrough darkness to light
& T- v/ [! E0 l. ~8 QNourished with my soul
7 T! _$ u1 J: v& @2 a2 |Devoured my sorrow by thee

In the memory of my life
You planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
0 M+ T4 G, p8 a+ |% WBursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
9 Z& C, w0 u4 |Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
: W6 ?. S1 f# z: ~0 ^( ]3 SDevoured my so ...

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/ w$ i' E$ I- P8 _( G眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

写得真好。

/ M: b* I2 T/ A' `加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
% |: m! `$ M4 K, N- X眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
8 l* x/ P4 I, A5 l* A, ^写得真好。
' i- B  b! {' d; m% j加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

9 ~9 u4 W9 U( R五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

! T( i8 S4 C1 S5 W  J2 U; }3 JSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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, X3 g9 b" X) f! ^" Q1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".

8 T( \+ ~6 c  H2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

. q9 @: K7 ?3 Y; OShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
8 \9 w- G, `/ L* l  Qthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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, H, L7 G! t' h4 s  p+ T, H% i诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
) ~, r# U  _$ b; W2 kthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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$ ]+ a0 j3 s. j有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

Don't weep at my grave
! @9 L9 _! F2 b* A) q  }  {For I am not there,
) W  h/ e1 U4 j) ^# A9 K3 [I've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
$ x4 r: T  S' g1 z% T: IIf I'm missed, find a flower,
; V/ ]6 t2 e/ v' M! e# ]0 oI'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.

% j+ p+ B( s- Y* e- zDon't be sad
, \( v" d/ @: G- z( G# nWhen you remember me,
; ]" l# s, `! J  TFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
' `- f. h9 C2 U& T( O( [" D# sFlirting with the lighting,
- N, A% l' f, g) [Playing tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
# L; u" q- l1 {4 o3 ?- dTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
) p* W* f! ]' N, HSwimming in the sea,
: B; O% l3 t* C) L1 h# o% R# UEnjoying all of nature
" N6 M6 Q$ k" }+ Z& D. i8 F: FWhile I'm waiting for thee.