In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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" V6 \2 O8 f$ z0 _. U/ bIn the garden of my heart
: T9 ?8 L8 s: }+ X- i' C6 ^You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
; O* n1 h3 ^* I( Z+ ^Through darkness to light
) h# K% J% \# w  c. NNourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee

9 ^3 r* B0 W! ~/ Z: y- mIn the memory of my life
You planted a dream
7 w1 s3 J" W+ t# M9 I# bShould the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me
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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
! g9 W6 i- C6 N- W. M听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
+ V$ z/ B* b% a0 `* I% aYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
( ~4 _9 J: _5 z/ R% D; aThrough darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
1 E+ j0 Q! H4 P9 ~Devoured my so ...

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, M5 A4 r, s* N5 Q( `眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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写得真好。
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% J: x- g) g% a  j" q加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
" ?/ y% `1 N4 f8 w) t, k眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
( W* f$ p* A' e3 g8 @, _加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
& Z+ I$ L% @. V/ t3 _8 q5 `如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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: J2 s  D( ~8 h" P. e4 D$ ~/ f: rThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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4 n( L$ _8 {; U2 v/ S1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".

2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
/ J  W2 v8 f' E1 ^6 b, Vthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

' N: b6 a/ D. L* vShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

有啊，有很多经典的例子。

8 h9 i2 T0 e% F* p' [# i3 P, P比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave
9 C; x* h' E# D$ GFor I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
$ R: d0 X2 W, k/ j9 STo dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
' i7 O" X; Z: [- `+ E% JI'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
) \/ n% U1 H7 Y- R! A3 \% pRight next to you.
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, n" J9 }& C. i, K3 y6 S8 ^! dDon't be sad
8 c$ s" P+ [! o+ }% m4 X0 qWhen you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
! [& a! [+ u1 F. e; X6 s1 {, M7 ?Wild and free,
Flirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
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0 `1 I2 a7 Z# B  s: \# j: d5 VTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
, b" F  `3 R% ]/ A/ i6 g; hSwimming in the sea,
Enjoying all of nature
8 f- y  A$ {( `! `: ?" W2 c) ~While I'm waiting for thee.