In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
% e% Q8 R% p. S7 Q6 {5 T* AThrough darkness to light
; o* U4 G/ d% ONourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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In the memory of my life
) P( _5 M) ^6 T4 `% ]9 k0 wYou planted a dream
/ g" T, z9 K. o" j* S/ V/ RShould the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
. h! `/ ~( \  W( qSewing back every broken pieces
* f$ s" w2 O; J' gBursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
2 f; F3 N, ]+ ^/ S6 M, C听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
, ^8 B2 ]& t' y# R: HThrough darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my so ...

& N  _* p0 o7 ~眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

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. t- t) V% E2 s& L# Y加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
$ {6 ^4 ]6 d0 }2 h3 |5 l写得真好。
加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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, Y0 B7 Y! m( P/ k) kSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

9 g8 z# [3 H' X% h" ]" HThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".

- c2 b# w5 ], Y% c6 ]2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
! ?. j0 L9 t" W  U% Ithee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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' l/ E% H5 q0 j诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
0 I8 L; O- Q# U4 ?4 m  W) s8 Fthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

- |$ |* l( k; h4 R' U! ?Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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( q' G4 }5 d' I; R6 U' w( b比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

5 X9 Q! S) f0 J5 p; ~. JDon't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
2 K/ Z7 U" d3 V4 AI've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
- ?3 t  g6 k5 S" M% C- xI'll be there too,
1 e6 L8 ^0 E& ^! [6 jSniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.
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Don't be sad
When you remember me,
! V: w2 s3 V3 ?For I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
# ?3 E: B: s+ G9 D& K1 D# SFlirting with the lighting,
8 G5 Q: [! ?: s" u; oPlaying tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
$ I6 _# v" ^- x) l2 W1 gTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
7 M! C( l- g% E+ ~$ K& bSwimming in the sea,
. T: x, z* ?1 B+ U+ w, ~Enjoying all of nature
1 h4 ?, Q( D' v( i6 |1 P7 `While I'm waiting for thee.