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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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6 C( b, O% d1 I  N3 X9 N- hIn the garden of my heart
+ r) F4 _  C2 K! d! I9 s- V2 fYou planted a tree! C2 Z+ A7 O1 w$ u* H3 u
From sunset til dawn
! k2 b! X+ x" O+ |8 [Through darkness to light" i3 [+ g3 a( p2 W; s! {: X$ ~
Nourished with my soul1 A9 f( t, ^) ]8 r( r: e8 [
Devoured my sorrow by thee# X% `8 ?0 X4 d# L! `) L9 n

+ ]2 j& G0 P9 Q( j3 |* L5 VIn the memory of my life3 I! x5 A$ ]0 D' R: u, t0 ^/ m8 U
You planted a dream
9 J! F0 l- s, |Should the sky fall down on me
! H% b3 n1 T! q5 {( qMay promises fade in the sea
1 H0 A7 Q; X# ?: bSewing back every broken pieces; M* A) [5 D' E- _
Bursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
2 W( q7 K1 v2 T, ^' @! d: q1 c听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!7 w2 F. t' y& D9 V8 O! C: D

& `2 l" J2 a$ L! U1 b0 y0 OIn the garden of my heart0 a, `; o" S' t7 |
You planted a tree
* A5 K. C# [! g, O+ D6 {  H1 e- f9 t  HFrom sunset til dawn
  V% `# Q/ @' iThrough darkness to light
* k# ^8 H6 o# ZNourished with my soul
+ f$ e6 w; [8 u! bDevoured my so ...

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; u! R" u; h# d% h5 u" K7 \  U) D眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?# Z' F& b/ N9 B- b0 q; P. i
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写得真好。/ y+ D" F* B6 `

# H8 ]' u) P- T7 D. u7 _$ m7 [加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表1 ^: w" g/ O) G# |0 L  K  Z
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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加精加精!
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表) S& H4 Y! A6 p+ V  d9 U
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

* }3 x$ v+ Y6 P/ F五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
5 y8 b; ^" @$ j+ n# M1 P+ T( XShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here." V# v& |8 T) [1 X9 V) X

' ?+ t  `% X; I8 a& qSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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& A$ e* g* O+ ]1 UThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.& T1 r$ O$ Y* H' Q
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".7 B# G7 V2 S4 {

$ ?1 |. B% o4 u% P+ X  ~/ ?2 k0 M# Q2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。6 R3 ~) J' v9 @
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
3 @3 R4 Y+ ~9 f  n1 s+ Uthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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, W) B0 M; U$ N- o* Q3 IShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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2 k* h, M- \8 Z诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
2 |4 }( q! ^% ^; O* |, athee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。/ C& K4 y  Z$ E/ x& T
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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$ ?1 f# f- |9 `有啊,有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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2 Y5 P" k  w; c' n! eDon't weep at my grave
, K3 r. p* r- H% E+ }8 kFor I am not there,* v1 ^* S( F2 P. }: m
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To dance on the air.# y) S$ v9 r+ A( K; `- d; B
If I'm missed, find a flower,5 v* s- W8 z' Z7 u3 O3 a! B* P, L
I'll be there too," d% ]- t" @; e: t' B
Sniffing it's fragrance6 R$ X9 N1 ^+ D3 C* E! u( u
Right next to you.6 v5 M3 _& J! m! ]8 v3 @0 R, O
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Don't be sad
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For I'm singing in the sunshine,, {; Y/ z) e8 t! d0 B
Wild and free,# |% O3 e5 U, m) f0 ~3 W+ ]
Flirting with the lighting,
6 C3 R1 [2 f6 k7 u' [, T( tPlaying tag with the wind,5 P- x& P' @. A4 |+ I3 `
Chasing the thunder
8 c$ F0 y* w  y( x7 }& ~Time and again,. F1 a4 U( E4 m- _" b& N; ?
Soaring with the eagle," ~9 `# m$ m8 X
Swimming in the sea,- a  J4 P8 E- z  T; f( q# F- }
Enjoying all of nature% Q6 s3 |( M' S& w# n: b5 N& }, v2 t, s
While I'm waiting for thee.
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