In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
9 k5 a- Y) a% C( Y& C% PYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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/ T2 V# d3 N2 X. zIn the memory of my life
  U( U$ R" a" Y% X/ EYou planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
  W- d! k0 N9 M. I1 uMay promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
0 Z- W  K5 J0 C听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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In the garden of my heart
1 n7 m" a! a1 E( g& u0 I, Q" b: ZYou planted a tree
) e1 ]0 S: |9 d" \From sunset til dawn
1 {" l, W9 F9 M4 }  ]: rThrough darkness to light
! C, R; v& u$ ~; r4 J$ ANourished with my soul
- |+ G0 d  G! h, V) D  h3 ]Devoured my so ...

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+ E# W% y" w& X% s: _眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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写得真好。
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7 \4 I$ S6 s2 u" W& Y加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
2 J* a( P1 q+ W2 s/ K2 ~眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
+ o9 u5 j% u+ s. |1 e写得真好。
加精加精！

; K8 ^8 Q3 \" P2 \  M我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
! O5 _! L) x- y" z9 H如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

/ w" O: l4 U% s# U五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
( u4 R9 z: e9 W1 q( Y9 aShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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. D; X! k( @' `2 rSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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8 ]2 ?( W/ h, \/ W1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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3 f, \. o7 V% ^! U8 |Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
% l: q: Z: W- b3 C& f+ ~. [( qthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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$ x; F9 e0 _  X. P3 `$ V- `- k比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

& c, W$ w: Q2 p! ^/ T, |: }, [- }8 XDon't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
' J% V& K" f6 A/ `  \1 h7 BI've a date with a butterfly
5 p. a7 Y. I- t0 p- A: t" O* RTo dance on the air.
2 D& M1 R6 {  F4 X& @If I'm missed, find a flower,
I'll be there too,
! p3 X: \$ U% X# P# CSniffing it's fragrance
- \' o! L' i1 Y7 n! C( X' r% W/ h+ LRight next to you.
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Don't be sad
When you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
, M/ s# T( t+ L+ z1 s  o- LWild and free,
" p1 e- U0 l8 y8 mFlirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
  J3 d2 i( n7 j8 ]! w9 f, BTime and again,
. H6 y. c9 m+ ~* bSoaring with the eagle,
* s3 W- f* W" s5 {/ r3 b/ F# iSwimming in the sea,
& X! A8 j( v  b2 M9 VEnjoying all of nature
$ `  H& ]4 _. _5 Y2 ~/ eWhile I'm waiting for thee.