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  1. The artist's work pushes our civilization to a higher level. : W0 J% D% d! C/ U

9 B- B) H$ M, o3 W, v5 r$ N' A5 u  改进:Artists' work upgrades our civilization.
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( H  q2 S: S8 V, K  2. For example, you work in a big factory. 0 u0 l& y( [5 I: U* {: s
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  改进: Suppose you work in a big factory.
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! m9 a1 B! @, j$ ]: g& w6 @4 E  3. You'll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job.
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  改进:You'll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career. $ |9 z% J* J) L! t
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  4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck.
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  改进: We will get nowhere if we rely on luck.
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% x& }( `- i% K: T  \. L  5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level. 0 Q! ?' @) C9 ~% O* a% P+ G

1 {0 E% Z, O9 U. Q; U1 {: Y  改进: He will get a higher salary, thus improving his life.
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  6. Their brain is still very young. 3 m0 @  y) ^! ]

8 q( T! g/ a' p" z  改进: They are still immature. : K3 k* j7 K0 ~( u9 V# M* E8 B- s7 S
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  7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things. : |1 ~& }3 C. B/ G7 v- ^# X
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  改进: Dissatisfaction impels people for the better. % B) M" y) h, I# F+ V2 ~" p' R

1 n$ q5 x( }' Z4 ]  8. They can't analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong.
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# b8 j& i  Z+ w  改进: They cannot tell right from wrong. - q, i+ ]6 `9 R

+ f  v0 V* h: M8 O  9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time. 2 T2 p$ _" M6 `2 N8 C: S# b
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  改进: It will help children learn to make good use of time. & a! F: X7 T$ G+ e( ^( D
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  10. Though it is not the best job, it afford to his life.
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1 x# f# J8 \! ?. a# {1 d- e, u  改进: Though it is not the best job, a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it.
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) A+ c& D# q2 k  11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation, they want further development.
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  改进: Since people are never satisfied with their status quo, they want further development.
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  12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money.
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; L2 H* ?6 \; R8 c1 T8 s) q  M' H  改进: The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money.
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  13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life. . s% o; V1 {: e- x; Z& e4 H

$ `: A8 c! }# e( Y2 N5 s; W! L  改进: They like an active life rather than a peaceful one. " L% Y; g. F7 S/ J2 p
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  14. Some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money.
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5 O) J3 R- K% E$ I. p9 E! V  R3 \5 x  改进: Some cigarettes may cost even more.
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  15. Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the discovery of new products.
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8 b+ p; Q# y/ q: v6 B$ r2 d' T/ i  改进: Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the invention of new products. ; @; r  ]/ w7 y7 ?

/ X4 ^0 ]. I' I0 C1 H& x2 k  16. In order to suit the needs of entering into work, students must grasp some technical skills. 8 N9 l; S, M3 W) M% k. @

  ^8 |% B. P, m5 _. Y- k  改进: In order to meet the needs of future work, students must learn some practical skills. 5 n8 Y8 q) o+ f- \- {. t

0 b' C- k, Q; H8 D3 {, l5 f  17. It is very necessary more qualified scientists and technicians.   }+ C2 T$ _7 t5 R# h

6 R. N2 g- ]3 s3 _" W4 k  s/ z  改进: Qualified scientists and technicians are in great demand.
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/ h' b5 F' N; ]' a  18. This knowledge will become a part of your body. ! x2 }& I7 u4 [- O- k

! A4 m2 d) x0 C5 D  改进: This knowledge will become part of you. 6 l: U4 S6 K3 N1 u! I( t7 [. Q5 k

& W' U8 K' G- h* h3 E  19. They cannot think clearly.
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  改进: They cannot think straight.
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& R6 g5 e3 e: j1 M# D- G  20. Money can improve their living standard. 2 w! h# T8 J. d
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  改进: Money can improve their life.
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  t5 C( b$ b4 Q$ j; I+ L4 R) X  21. Parents always think that children will get a good job and earn a lot of money.
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  改进: Parents always expect their children to get a good job and earn a lot of money.
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  22. If a student only cares about money, will lead to be unhappy all his life. 5 w& e4 t8 |0 D: b% [
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  改进: If a student only cares about money, he will be misled and will be unhappy all his life. ; y2 k% c; o- [+ L3 ^
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  23. One purpose of education is to study the way in which he studies later.
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  改进: One purpose of education is to learn to learn.
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  24. Many parents arrange their children go to learn piano.
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  改进: Many parents send their children to piano classes.
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. V! B3 N$ `: J& A  25. When I want to absorb somebody else's opinion, I will study with others.
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  改进: When I need second opinion, I will study with others.
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& c/ ^) C! p6 A( e; ^  改进: The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal.
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7 W+ S+ S/ o% X6 M3 G  27. Smoking can help you relax your mind. 3 X; Z1 B6 S; M4 m) ^! Y

6 X# J  b+ u& v- P2 |: A  改进: Cigarettes can help you relax.
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  28. What's about nonsmokers?
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  改进: What about nonsmokers?
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  29. Why not to be a non-smoker?
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  改进: Why not be a non-smoker?
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  30. Everyone will have many friends in his life. . P  s7 j8 d2 c$ L/ T
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  改进: Everyone has friends in his life.
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; z. \5 Z( H% x% W! W1 F. s- G  31. I am not good at maths, but English / o/ x$ k! X# i/ U4 K" y

' m4 a& J' ]0 Z2 L2 @  改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English. * k6 e/ H, \! M0 z4 R& [

/ {  ?1 a4 B8 B* N& h, E& ?6 N$ J  32. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children's leisure time? / q4 o" G% q  q2 m
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  改进: Who is the proper person to plan children's leisure time?
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0 N- `0 v" x1 A- l  33.It is children who clear about their interests. , H& d) d. m$ w% N% g
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  改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests. . N4 W2 n" u' `

) U( @5 R' x" p: o" w; d. A6 g9 P  34. I agree the latter idea.
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  改进: I agree with the latter idea.
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  35. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo.
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  改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo.
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( r+ `" x7 j4 c( B  36. So I feel breathe more comfortably now. 7 f/ T$ M8 G. c: _
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  改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe. $ a% [/ t& H+ l2 i6 E0 e: m
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  37. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are.
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6 ]: ], X& m% k5 B  G- l  改进:People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn. " @7 t2 p( a2 i! r' z* Y

9 I8 N7 ?1 i; d8 W7 ^6 I9 A& {$ l  38. No one knows all the things. 7 T( H) l( Y8 r# ?

9 H5 a/ }) a# ~  改进: No one knows everything.
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  39. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life.
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" B, r2 o9 V* Z. H  改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life.
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3 m9 U$ K8 U& ~( Z" R  M* r  40. Each form of having friends has its advantages
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  改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages. + T4 F( I6 k! L) Y  m* o
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  41. I was admitted to a key university for which few dared to sign up. * s( p9 H% h6 q0 [1 T$ n
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  改进: I was admitted to a key university to which few dared to apply
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4 X, |( ]) Y+ A) i  42. Luckily, he recognized an American professor.
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# O0 X6 c* \% L' {( J* }$ i% _: D  改进: Luckily, he knew an American professor.
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  43. They will learn the bad habits. 1 K/ }1 a- T6 J( W8 r$ D8 ?2 S
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  改进: They will develop bad habits.
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  44. In this continued process, people make progress. # U, G1 _# G5 X: S$ W" O5 l, K

% L) C! p5 D, i  改进: In this cycle, people make progress.
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  45. Lastly, higher education is equal to higher salary.
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' Q; I) c, I# L+ T; E  改进: Lastly, higher education means higher salary. 0 z% p" p6 a( G& X2 T8 W; z

9 k3 Z; R- U  x* r& N( _) G: c  46. By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for deficiency. + J: U5 ?0 S& |6 l: w1 d/ V

+ F9 V2 A% M, X+ Q4 V; U8 z8 Y& ?  改进: By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for our shortcomings.
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  47. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact.
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  48. You spend all your life to fulfill your willing. & U- v9 d7 M+ _9 g4 M( |, l
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  改进: You devote all your life to the fulfillment of your dream.
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# q. ~/ z8 I" J* ~% @  A  49. Children should be taught disciplines in order to avoid unnecessary lost. : r) c% Y8 E% c( J- h1 Z% V( c

  J! S9 U& V) i' U  改进: Children should be taught discipline in order to avoid unnecessary loss.
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. i/ h! P* h8 @+ a4 E; W/ g3 I7 g  50. I felt alone. # U4 s( P6 i  C; T; a6 {$ P- R
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发表于 2005-2-24 08:39 | 显示全部楼层
wow, where did you get those sample (the cheglish one)? I have to say the revised samples are really really good.
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Thanks
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 楼主| 发表于 2005-2-26 07:02 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
平时的积累,呵呵!
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发表于 2005-2-26 14:03 | 显示全部楼层

顶!

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发表于 2005-3-1 08:25 | 显示全部楼层

很好。

能否解释一下 status quo 是什么意思。
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发表于 2005-3-1 08:37 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
是现状的意思
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发表于 2005-4-9 18:26 | 显示全部楼层
:lol::lol::lol:
理袁律师事务所
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发表于 2005-4-9 20:42 | 显示全部楼层
Wow,看得我头晕目悬的...还是记不住...呵呵
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发表于 2005-4-9 21:09 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
有些改进似乎意思有些改变...
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发表于 2005-8-24 02:47 | 显示全部楼层
好哦.xiexie
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发表于 2005-8-24 19:48 | 显示全部楼层
thanks
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