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发表于 2005-2-24 07:24 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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  1. The artist's work pushes our civilization to a higher level. % g: e% W& u' K: F4 D, G" y3 O
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  改进:Artists' work upgrades our civilization.
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5 M) o, J. F2 ]( k2 f  2. For example, you work in a big factory.
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  改进: Suppose you work in a big factory.
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3 ^8 j# b& b8 O0 h, k: `* |  3. You'll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job. / G+ w3 y( P# P/ v' h; N& \! a5 T+ l2 U

. K2 H4 f" y4 E! c' P  改进:You'll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career.
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  4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck. $ _. _" E+ l8 x

6 t, Q9 r- g! i  [  改进: We will get nowhere if we rely on luck. - c; u& a0 n. X' Q% W5 y# M

, P2 O, f& ?/ v0 r  5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level.
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  改进: He will get a higher salary, thus improving his life. / D1 p: O5 ~2 r2 k( e. p* e
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  6. Their brain is still very young.
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1 K0 v5 \7 H* {8 I5 Q  改进: They are still immature. / T# H' e1 O+ e
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  7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things.
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0 @& q: O& o- U2 Z( p7 @6 Y$ ~  改进: Dissatisfaction impels people for the better.
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  8. They can't analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong.
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  改进: They cannot tell right from wrong. . H, i' G+ g5 j$ l7 H9 t

3 Y' Q/ y) g2 y* \2 G9 f  9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time. 8 R3 H+ s% w* ]# W" w; X7 s
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  改进: It will help children learn to make good use of time. ; R1 x9 {- e) i' z2 X" L
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  10. Though it is not the best job, it afford to his life.
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2 |; A: q8 `3 _  j/ J  改进: Though it is not the best job, a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it. ) b! \! K& x1 s( G+ g5 `7 C4 X; h
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  11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation, they want further development. " E" y# K6 e* u# z

6 ]! e5 _8 ~" s/ I( {$ v# a  改进: Since people are never satisfied with their status quo, they want further development. 6 K2 c- N3 z- }' x  ?3 B# x! d
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  12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money.
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  改进: The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money. 0 k* S$ ~; f- ^( N* F

( j2 k+ [4 R7 Z7 l/ C( _& l- K$ Y  13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life.
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1 o7 x; l5 P1 d( j2 `7 Y. w7 |0 _  改进: They like an active life rather than a peaceful one.
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  14. Some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money.
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  改进: Some cigarettes may cost even more. 4 P* h) C9 H' J

2 ?( N( U7 E, Q  l6 T* }, H  15. Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the discovery of new products. , Q+ N2 u$ w% n5 C+ F

# \/ w1 Z, ]1 W- y: b, m  改进: Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the invention of new products.
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  16. In order to suit the needs of entering into work, students must grasp some technical skills. 8 \8 o$ [# S, _$ e# w

9 \4 B# }4 ~! J5 i  改进: In order to meet the needs of future work, students must learn some practical skills. ( `( k2 F# {& C/ k* n

3 o; w( ]1 n( |+ ~# k' b  17. It is very necessary more qualified scientists and technicians.
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  改进: Qualified scientists and technicians are in great demand.
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5 ]2 O1 ~+ N& N  18. This knowledge will become a part of your body.
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. p, f6 ?% O* m4 J  改进: This knowledge will become part of you.
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# k, i+ P1 S6 _* l8 I6 a  19. They cannot think clearly. 9 j  e1 h1 [' t- K* {/ ?& g

5 B, n3 s2 n7 q( b, {7 }5 K+ v  改进: They cannot think straight.
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9 _  z3 l9 K( v4 a; F4 H" E  20. Money can improve their living standard. ! d$ O5 m9 l; n1 J( q* B

$ Y: u2 I) e6 u! e( [  改进: Money can improve their life.
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7 D% B; J/ \5 x  21. Parents always think that children will get a good job and earn a lot of money.
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$ c  G; k; y; f+ B# T' ?5 h: |( Q2 Y. ^  改进: Parents always expect their children to get a good job and earn a lot of money. ) s4 f  v; b  C
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  22. If a student only cares about money, will lead to be unhappy all his life. / n- F( [9 M. r; |" d* ^8 k

; p& r" ]/ w4 W2 v  [1 U4 _$ Q  改进: If a student only cares about money, he will be misled and will be unhappy all his life. 5 S) l2 K) [" q" L; Z2 e. _
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  23. One purpose of education is to study the way in which he studies later. 6 f" n  B) Q# }- A! N2 s
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  改进: One purpose of education is to learn to learn.
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  24. Many parents arrange their children go to learn piano. 6 G) R+ j; @5 |+ y1 t, V4 f

* Q5 i1 a5 w# C" i; n' n5 a  改进: Many parents send their children to piano classes. 1 `% ?3 |. u9 ~' E! D/ z
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  25. When I want to absorb somebody else's opinion, I will study with others. & q7 Q6 l5 U6 L  X: W* t

1 L, f* ?. y/ h, Z  改进: When I need second opinion, I will study with others.
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' `# T5 z# o/ d* r/ w. L2 Z) N& {* B  26. Eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finish eating without doing any washing.
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  改进: The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal. : O, R5 {, }" n0 L

. G" a: U5 N: G8 c8 F5 S  27. Smoking can help you relax your mind. 4 n; P8 H2 J; A8 @6 u9 v, F
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  改进: Cigarettes can help you relax.
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/ I3 _$ ~8 ^- |( x  28. What's about nonsmokers? . \% \% H) [$ e, h
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  改进: What about nonsmokers?
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" o& S  u% d9 `0 K! N' M% J! k# p  29. Why not to be a non-smoker? 9 J! \. g4 U, q" }/ u

* O7 n6 S- d7 }+ w  改进: Why not be a non-smoker?
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  30. Everyone will have many friends in his life. + @: g: D. {/ F! _" @# r

9 M5 ]+ S6 @9 k+ a# m2 c  改进: Everyone has friends in his life. ) g- }9 e( E' _8 Q+ P

0 c1 A) Z" N* E( R: r  31. I am not good at maths, but English 4 |9 g$ |8 x+ `8 Y+ C
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  改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English.
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: t! \# o+ g% r" S; q$ O" k  32. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children's leisure time?
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  改进: Who is the proper person to plan children's leisure time?
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  33.It is children who clear about their interests.
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3 M* H1 k. O' o- w0 i. g% s  改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests.
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  34. I agree the latter idea.
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  改进: I agree with the latter idea. , X6 P; [. J0 w( q3 `

; l* b  E+ f( b9 I. `  35. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo. , p3 K( C% B' W! e3 d' H
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  改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo.
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  36. So I feel breathe more comfortably now. 3 t/ h- n0 u7 U
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  改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe.
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, `) Y& A2 b- n; E  37. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are. + Y. E3 {; D" r% \* U, r4 v

4 d/ Z0 g# ], P  改进:People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn. 6 i9 Y; o) o/ N( Z1 L8 r
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  38. No one knows all the things.
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  改进: No one knows everything. 6 r" b+ w6 F' G9 J* m! q& [

! v* v: _% D) c2 X0 N- _2 C  39. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life.
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9 J8 r5 x, b( b2 U9 P- J) i  改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life.
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: E5 A5 I  C8 x0 w  40. Each form of having friends has its advantages
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  改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages. % q8 {; P/ i* b- D, H4 d' t. m
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  41. I was admitted to a key university for which few dared to sign up. ( D: G; Z5 F6 @, r- T

8 l) J4 j# z# q) X7 x, R! |  改进: I was admitted to a key university to which few dared to apply
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. y! p1 X% W3 ?4 N- z# t# Y  42. Luckily, he recognized an American professor. . s' ^3 j0 ~2 s$ j. M1 X2 X
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  改进: Luckily, he knew an American professor.
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  43. They will learn the bad habits. 2 U) E1 v9 u: G' D) D
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  改进: They will develop bad habits.
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  44. In this continued process, people make progress. % ^% Y* L+ W# C1 g
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  改进: In this cycle, people make progress. 9 k( A% N( p2 K* F
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  45. Lastly, higher education is equal to higher salary. : e5 a4 q1 p$ X) H) ?. W
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  改进: Lastly, higher education means higher salary. 5 p, v& V- p0 Y2 O

% N) j- Y% w, l9 j8 o& v2 @9 {  46. By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for deficiency.
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  改进: By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for our shortcomings. " W5 R. W% n+ h5 M5 I) g4 L, c' ^7 {
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  47. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact.
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  48. You spend all your life to fulfill your willing.
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2 ?0 J& j1 |( s8 V9 e* Q  改进: You devote all your life to the fulfillment of your dream. # |+ b) H9 P% q
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  49. Children should be taught disciplines in order to avoid unnecessary lost.
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  改进: Children should be taught discipline in order to avoid unnecessary loss. # g/ P* [: I6 w( M4 c

1 R4 c/ E$ j$ t; l. O4 `( c  50. I felt alone.
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, l' A9 I7 N( H# X" R$ S. f  改进: I felt lonely.
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发表于 2005-2-24 08:39 | 显示全部楼层
wow, where did you get those sample (the cheglish one)? I have to say the revised samples are really really good. 3 Q* W! N5 U1 A

' h: X( u; ^8 zThanks
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发表于 2005-2-24 09:08 | 显示全部楼层

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 楼主| 发表于 2005-2-26 07:02 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
平时的积累,呵呵!
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发表于 2005-2-26 14:03 | 显示全部楼层

顶!

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发表于 2005-3-1 08:25 | 显示全部楼层

很好。

能否解释一下 status quo 是什么意思。
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发表于 2005-3-1 08:37 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
是现状的意思
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发表于 2005-4-9 18:26 | 显示全部楼层
:lol::lol::lol:
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发表于 2005-4-9 20:42 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
Wow,看得我头晕目悬的...还是记不住...呵呵
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发表于 2005-4-9 21:09 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
有些改进似乎意思有些改变...
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发表于 2005-8-24 02:47 | 显示全部楼层
好哦.xiexie
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发表于 2005-8-24 19:48 | 显示全部楼层
thanks
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