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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart
; x" `5 D" U9 `$ W& @You planted a tree
$ B. T9 M& F- k2 {" RFrom sunset til dawn1 f( e% ]6 Y6 n% ^! L& X( W' B
Through darkness to light
/ V8 d( ~4 M- x. _) zNourished with my soul  r: N# S& e3 _# j4 f  d' s
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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8 p' m' H8 j0 EIn the memory of my life1 ]1 b, z) n" Q. _$ u! @9 k
You planted a dream
7 }3 t2 B5 \' {Should the sky fall down on me; k3 H2 H$ s4 x) m' B5 Y
May promises fade in the sea$ r, G; \: c. r4 f8 ~
Sewing back every broken pieces/ _* Z4 I. h4 j
Bursting the love out of me, t! e1 e* z0 {6 R

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
8 D( a& L2 _6 h, d- x3 b8 f听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart. ]. D- t8 l+ t+ o
You planted a tree; q2 r% c3 P- p
From sunset til dawn
' I1 ^- j2 }7 ^2 G' z! xThrough darkness to light
4 e' u# f# t: X3 ^0 Y  q4 c% T) ANourished with my soul& ?  c3 X% S0 m. m# Y0 f- b
Devoured my so ...

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/ G- q* V* G3 w) T眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?3 M4 ]( `1 D/ o/ `& C% [

; T3 u9 R' E3 {( a2 a写得真好。
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表0 u) s, a' p. `, v0 n2 r: a
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
  G' m8 {/ G9 Q4 r写得真好。2 r8 s% r( t' t5 W2 c
加精加精!
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
; t4 X1 h, a0 z( i- Q$ z如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here., }5 X7 U/ Z- N

% g5 f0 q# i- U3 I& ESewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
9 y( ~/ F5 u( N" X( s# s! Q7 rShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.$ D5 i: b4 P0 L) r

- b  W# e8 p  C7 i0 X5 d) W4 |Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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8 S+ T8 o$ s2 k/ O  R9 dThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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( |) x# s: ^6 l$ u# @! V1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".) i+ r- }! D$ T8 Q! G" [, s% D- E) {

8 Z$ S+ q. U) G2 \2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
1 |4 F2 }! s# |% Athee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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0 S5 \4 ]/ k0 q7 j+ W" _4 xShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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& B5 ]: M! ]' I4 y% }  q9 }诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表  a! n1 M, [  V
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。- j, _# V6 h* K4 q

3 H3 k3 M* M/ O1 s3 y1 z3 J. VShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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& E. z5 S3 K1 g0 O/ Q& _有啊,有很多经典的例子。
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1 v  B0 F% n6 E' I比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》7 K7 k& [' X0 B
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Don't weep at my grave
5 H8 p  e( u1 N* Y1 G7 Q' \. bFor I am not there,
$ G( L. f+ Z* vI've a date with a butterfly
3 Q$ R( y9 I3 r6 T5 D4 K" b+ z- ITo dance on the air.
# O- F2 ?- X" {3 A0 d3 \If I'm missed, find a flower,
" S0 @8 c/ X5 i/ n- xI'll be there too,
- o- j; v! c: X7 A3 }, l: DSniffing it's fragrance
# q- a, q, r7 W9 d  |( o2 z- cRight next to you.
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0 P- c7 F. v7 c) W3 p/ PDon't be sad; `6 R3 i( I+ B7 h' z  x
When you remember me," Q. t" @  G6 v) |/ |
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
. q+ @, K' x* S8 C: ?! EWild and free,
# [# [: T2 b% ~/ L, CFlirting with the lighting,/ ~6 G: G  J  ~! k1 H: \3 |' W
Playing tag with the wind,
$ k, n. ]  Y$ B* l+ D8 [( KChasing the thunder
( u$ R( I* i: G/ G5 c7 w' i; o: qTime and again,9 m! l) y1 D' V* A
Soaring with the eagle," }' I' w# Z1 B) h, f. Z
Swimming in the sea,( _3 F" X. x) a( V; }' C% s
Enjoying all of nature
, n9 f% h) S  Q' D0 sWhile I'm waiting for thee.
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