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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart) n% m2 `5 i. Z9 Y, |$ h4 L, p, I
You planted a tree' w% O# w; u! S9 ]0 S( C
From sunset til dawn$ e& a5 L5 p# S2 u) m9 _# B& S
Through darkness to light# ~# B5 T3 w( b. d2 c) X
Nourished with my soul+ O, H2 g( ?7 C
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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5 F& J5 S- f% f2 t: bIn the memory of my life
$ ~) S6 c5 q% [0 gYou planted a dream
6 s4 U5 P8 D0 w  K( p4 b# cShould the sky fall down on me
( g, P8 ]& p, R5 F! d5 oMay promises fade in the sea
! v3 `, Z7 ?6 D/ o. y: KSewing back every broken pieces6 u. G0 H2 [8 A( s; @- V7 {
Bursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
! r2 G5 F! T+ `/ B& [) E听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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4 j' w# @7 E, g+ }9 @  Q- rIn the garden of my heart- C% c9 ~( I0 t
You planted a tree
* _! |% J# x3 e/ y1 ]& b& p% @From sunset til dawn6 k' J& S2 p, K' s! G$ q( Z
Through darkness to light
' }  b3 X( b2 B" R2 G2 |  T' cNourished with my soul
' n7 F. k% y( v  L1 S) J! `9 W* aDevoured my so ...
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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?& w4 B* i3 |3 w4 m* ~1 v
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写得真好。
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) `! c( d/ D: _: a加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
$ _7 B+ M7 }- q0 H; a  A眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?( g1 m& {( N4 H& [* m. A( f
写得真好。
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
4 }3 X: R7 i5 @' ]如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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4 a! [! o* F8 r& iSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
* [$ v2 ~* V9 N0 A$ T% \Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.' i8 I% q  V$ B( O
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".) Q  q0 v: `. Y4 K- b: X; Q$ j

; Y9 _8 f: U# x# m: m) X2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
" a4 V9 @8 d3 D% Rthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
6 h7 Z5 S" v0 X  k9 H$ P) J& Fthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。* Q6 c% B/ P# H7 Z+ p
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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有啊,有很多经典的例子。
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  k3 ^" }6 @7 j9 P0 i2 e比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave" b% `% c4 \) \- q! ?
For I am not there,
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If I'm missed, find a flower,0 l! d2 H# t& C) d
I'll be there too,
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Right next to you.- l8 R: E: ]7 t# M# _' w

- i, E) C4 ^3 S% HDon't be sad
8 k9 k( V1 |. l8 g6 u- H# ?When you remember me,
7 {( u# e3 v. SFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
) j! ^3 r" A+ N: @) J: t* ~Wild and free,
* ]1 ~$ s. E1 z$ S( a! zFlirting with the lighting,
; a; d. ]# c- R$ V' P: GPlaying tag with the wind,* ~" p; a0 x' w
Chasing the thunder
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1 ?' G, t4 w% m9 \) h" h5 `Soaring with the eagle,
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Enjoying all of nature
* y  u  K: G% G- cWhile I'm waiting for thee.
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