In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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1 |# b5 x# ?, c4 lIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
5 o9 J# {- [' x: LNourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee

In the memory of my life
0 s/ c" C  I3 |. }( U: v, @" bYou planted a dream
+ h% e2 z3 n5 b: ]1 z- fShould the sky fall down on me
1 G4 }( w! z1 p" `. x  a/ B- j$ JMay promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
. a2 I) T4 o4 N% d8 P$ h6 I6 d+ y听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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In the garden of my heart
# w0 c0 S! H+ h) mYou planted a tree
) o/ ^# }; h. h( p% ^. t$ }" x: B' v$ Q! kFrom sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
6 A0 e, J3 \! t* ]9 G+ T; }Devoured my so ...

眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

4 _: m& K: d! Q4 v0 N写得真好。

加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
" m! K. c, j& ?, m# Z& |加精加精！

: i* _+ g7 p5 g! V我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

) L% M, U- Q7 ^, G% m五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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2 N# k) O' l% S/ A& MSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

5 c1 P/ h* E1 d- j: FSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

8 X2 T+ ^2 A7 j
Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.

1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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6 s6 Y1 @, A& n% V" W' ]  T* W2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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4 {$ u2 J: v6 x9 VShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
4 o/ K! w! E( \9 N0 Y9 R7 Pthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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0 t0 L$ j3 j7 WShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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有啊，有很多经典的例子。

3 }/ ?2 o2 x" {  _/ R比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave
* h1 o" n% E2 L) a5 S! Q- Q- GFor I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
$ m4 z5 ^# f5 e9 U) yIf I'm missed, find a flower,
: L" o2 y! v  j  \I'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
7 O$ N% B* W) C0 m/ vRight next to you.
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Don't be sad
When you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
. J0 M9 v- I# ?1 h+ JWild and free,
4 O* E6 T5 Q/ [5 n. g) bFlirting with the lighting,
5 ?! C6 `9 R  N3 C6 HPlaying tag with the wind,
. ^% a/ ]. ?) z& T( T5 h) eChasing the thunder
% @7 z; c; R+ b: s$ K* f+ k9 m. k) S# eTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
Swimming in the sea,
Enjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.